The proposal was successful in doing this because it used factual information and statistics to help prove its point. It used many examples when it came to discussing how important Opium is in the medical community. For example, "Senlis estimates that meeting the global need for pain medications would require 10,000 tons of opium a year- more than twice Afghanistan's current production (354). It was facts like this that made the essay effective.
The author believes that Opium should continue to be grown in third world country because of the need of opium for medical reasons. The author also believes that we should not pay attention to Opium in the drug world.
I think that in order to make the essay more effective the author needed to stay focused on one subject more. I found myself distracted by the various examples the author used, some of which carried away from the original point. Other than this I found the proposal to be very effective.
2 comments:
Kenzie--
I agree with both the points that you made in your blog. The first one about how the statistics in this essay truly added something to the article. For me, these facts showed how much these countries need this drug, which was the author's goal. The second point I agree with you is how you were distracted because the author used so many examples. I also found myself getting sidetracked from all of this as well.
-Erin
I agree, the ideas and thoughts are all there, but i think it's a little hopeful. It's probably much more difficult to get rid of these things than he makes out to be. It sounds nice in theory, but I'm not so sure it's really that possible. there are many unforseeable factors and outcomes that could come into play.
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